The second crusader challenge has been posted and here are the guidelines:
Write a flash fiction story (in any format) in 100 words or less, excluding the title. Begin the story with the words, “The goldfish bowl teetered” These four words will be included in the word count.
The Writer
The goldfish bowl teeters as I lean forward to toss the page into the chasm between houses that stand back to back against the onslaught of weather. Falling back into the chair, I begin my opus -60 a fifth time. I palm the stem that sits at hand. Wine washes down a sob. Murmuring quietly "not writer. Hack!" I push myself away from the table. Catching on the corner of the chair I tip… teeter-totter… steady myself before avalanching off the balcony and tilt toward the nearby Jacuzzi, falling gracelessly into the womb warmth of the water.
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Nice. The one I wrote "Literary Fiction" style also features a frustrated writer, though the ending is a little different.
ReplyDeleteAww! Poor writer. What a way to possibly end it all. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis feels very 'stream of consciousness' to me - I like it!
ReplyDeleteNice original take on those 4 words! From a writer's POV. :) (poor writer, however)
ReplyDeleteNice writers take on this! I enjoyed reading it, specially the ending. Poor writer.
ReplyDeleteAhh, the sting of rejection! Hope the writer makes it out of the womb. :)
ReplyDeleteGee, I hope the writer lived. : (
ReplyDeleteThis was terrific. : )
I loved this ;) Love the "hack" part :P
ReplyDeletePoor depressed writer!! I want to give it a hug :)
Jacuzzi? I want to be a hack like that! :) Great job!
ReplyDeletePoor writer! But hey! There is wine and a jacuzzi, sounds like a recipe for RELAXATION! Lol!
ReplyDeleteWomb warmth water... Love the alliteration.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this! Splash.
ReplyDeleteLike your new blog design too.
Rogue: I didn't find your challenge entry on your blog but I'll keep looking.
ReplyDeleteCherie: Thanks! Writing is a tough gig, isn't it?
Sierra: Some of my other writing is definitely stream of consciousness so this would fit in and thanks!
Carol: It is a bit different. Thanks for dropping by!
Summer: Thank you and thanks for the comment!
Cally: Me too!
thingy: Thank you!*blushes*
Trish: Thanks! Writers need hugs too!! lol
Rebecca: Thanks and a jacuzzi nearby when writing would be great wouldn't it?
Amanda: I think the wine accounts for the tipping and tilting.
Cheesy: Thanks! I like getting alliteration into my writing.
Ladyfi: Thank you and thank you! I wasn't sold on the green but it fit with the picture better than any other.
Ah, I've been there! Hope the wine and hot tub help the frustrated narrator :))
ReplyDeleteGreat entry, Danette!
Good imagery. Great emotion. WE have all been there.
ReplyDeleteSo, I guess the moral of the story is, when I'm down on my writing, stay away from wine and balconies? :) Love your take on the prompt! Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteLoved it. Well written and very touching.
ReplyDeleteHi Nicole: I would venture to say, if you haven't been there as a writer, perhaps you're not really writing!
ReplyDeleteJeanne: Me too. Bad days as a writer/artist are not like other occupations you do. It can tear you up inside!
Donea: Thanks! Perhaps it is the moral of the story :)
Tony: Thank you! and thanks for dropping by!
Very poetic. Enjoyed the nuance.
ReplyDeleteAt least he ended up in a hot tub. I hope he survived!
ReplyDeleteNow I don't want to own a balcony or a Jacuzzi any more - good job ;)
ReplyDeleteGreat the Jacuzzi was there! ;)
ReplyDeleteHappy Friday!
♥.•*¨Elizabeth¨*•.♥
Well done :)
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